You are not yet setting this up with a clear thesis that you follow through on.

You are not yet setting this up with a clear thesis that you follow through on. And areas of your writing about your research appear incorrectly attributed. Please use ALL of my comments–here, below, and on your draft (open the bubbles) and revise carefully. You will also need to include reflections on this for the final. And no more drafts go through me so post any parts that you want feedback on.
Review MLA page format still
Intro needs work to include a thesis
Make sure your paragraph indents are clear. You need to work on paragraphing.
Plagiarism alert! Your research is good, but as it is currently written it is plagiarised. Review in-text citation and paraphrasing. It feels like “patchwork” plagiarism is happening here.
This really needs to be 4 full pages of text. Develop this by including your own ideas more.
PLEASE WRITE 4 FULL PAGES! REWRITE A CLEAR THESIS!
ABSOLUTELY NO PLAGIARISM! FUNDS WILL NOT BE RELEASED!
https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/research_and_citation/mla_style/mla_formatting_and_style_guide/mla_sample_paper.html